Charlie II

*mouth drops open* ...Why?...Why?...Why is Eragon and Da Vinci Code above the Bible? Is it just me or is there something very very very scary about that. DarkLight

... The Da Vinci code? Number 2? That really does explain why Eragon is at number 19! I suppose this is because it's the top selling books and not the ...

Easter chocolate is the best type: delicious, dark and delicately eased into the shape of a bunny. Good old Lindts! Unfortunately, it wasn’t mine. Nevertheless, the forbidden treat on the ...

This is a storybook RPG, not sure to how that translates to a "choose your own adventure" thing. Ooops, my bad! I get what you mean now I had a ...

AWritersFantasy: I think it's a 'Choose your own adventure' type story where you read as 'the group' and make decisions that affect the outcome of the story. At least, I ...

Very good, I can second what most of the others have said but I have one other main point of my own: Exaggeration. My body fell slowly, but my stomach ...

Wow, you have definate style! It's a very good piece of writing. Just a few points: She was lucky that she had got up before everyone else because normally she ...

Good plot, I like the ideas and ways that your characters very matter of factly go about their lives. Just a few points: “What do we do, Uncle?” he asked ...

Erm, for the books, you need to use 'an' instead of 'a' in your last line. and a annoying poem!!!! Also, ration the exclaimation point. They're so overused :? . ...

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Well, sounds fun! I'd help with anyone/anything needed but I have no real ideas of my own at the moment. Co-authoring sounds fun (did I just say that? Perhaps I ...

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Lol, it's refreshing to read something different like this :) . Just a few points: “Oh yeah, sure,” she said, wearing an all-knowing expression that made the usually peaceful Sasha ...

/me waves Well Hi! Shout out when you've posted your first writing and I'll have a look :). DarkLight

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